Scriptn redraft

Scriptn redraft

1 int brothers house day
john 18 years old lives in a mansion he has blond hair a big nose big ears and he wears a smart suit.
Sarah 15 years old blond hair and blue eyes she is very pretty 
housemaid in her late 60s grey hair blue eyes and shakey hands.

john

where is Sarah have you seen  her at all.

housemaid

no i have not seen Sarah since this morning i was going to ask you where she is.

John

Sarah should be back by now.

housemaid

yes she should be back by now.

john

i'm going out to go and look for her.

housemaid

please do because i am starting to get worried

 

(John goes out to go and look for his sister.)

 

2 EXT the streets day

John and the house maid walk through the streets, looking concerned and glancing around.

 

                                                                              John 

 Sarah where are you ?

 

Housemaid

Sarah! Sarah!

they were looking for the girl but they coulden't find her so they gave up looking for her in the streets 

 

3 ext police station day
 they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.

housemaid

do you think we should go to the police station so they could help us look for Sarah.

John

yes that would be a good idea.

4 int brothers house again 
they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.

John

Sarah where is Sarah.

housemaid

we shoulden't have let her go now she is gone

john

yes we shoulden't have let her go it was incredibly dangeros.

7  int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house 
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location 
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.

Scriptn redraft

1 int brothers house day
john 18 years old lives in a mansion he has blond hair a big nose big ears and he wears a smart suit.
Sarah 15 years old blond hair and blue eyes she is very pretty 
housemaid in her late 60s grey hair blue eyes and shakey hands.

john

where is Sarah have you seen  her at all.

housemaid

no i have not seen Sarah since this morning i was going to ask you where she is.

John

Sarah should be back by now.

housemaid

yes she should be back by now.

john

i'm going out to go and look for her.

housemaid

please do because i am starting to get worried

 

(John goes out to go and look for his sister.)

 

2 EXT the streets day

John and the house maid walk through the streets, looking concerned and glancing around.

 

                                                                              John 

 Sarah where are you ?

 

Housemaid

Sarah! Sarah!

they were looking for the girl but they coulden't find her so they gave up looking for her in the streets 

 

5 ext police station day
 they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.
6 int brothers house again 
they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.
7  int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house 
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location 
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.

log for movie

i was the camera man and the location that we did our scene is was the school canteen or restaurant.
basically what happened in the scene is that ikrima was a boxer and abdulaziz was the his coach that trains him.

ikrima owes money to zieshan who is a gangstar so ikrima is sick and tired of getting remined about the money all the time so he asks zieshan for a fight. he says tmorow 6 o'clock in the boxing ring.and then zieshan accepts the fight and says yeah if you make it at all. abdulaziz was the coach so he kept telling krima to do uppercuts and to duck if needed basicxally he was giving him instructions.

script

1 int brothers house day

john 18 years old lives in a mansion he has blond hair a big nose big ears and he wears a smart suit.
Sarah 15 years old blond hair and blue eyes she is very pretty 
housemaid in her late 60s grey hair blue eyes and shakey hands.

john

where is Sarah have you seen  her at all.

housemaid

no i have not seen Sarah since this morning i was going to ask you where she is.

John

Sarah should be back by now.

housemaid

yes she should be back by now.

john

i'm going out to go and look for her.

housemaid

please do because i am starting to get worried

(John goes out to go and look for his sister.)

John 

(shouting) SARAH WHERE ARE YOU ?

1  EXT ALLEYWAY NIGHT
A blonde pretty 16 year old girl called Sarah is walking down a dark alleyway. A dark figure creeps up on Sarah whilst she is walking through the alleyway the dark figure creeps up on her and puts a tissue over her mouth and he drags her off screen.

2 INT brother's house day
had a brother at home john who is worried his sister sarah is late coming home from ... so he decides to leave to look for her.
 john, sarah's brother is a 18 year old man, john lives in a mansion he is reading a book he is in a dark room and has a candlelight on. the housemaid is in the living room cleaning the the room the room she is in is well lit with lots of candles. the housemaid is looking worried. the housemaid asks John if he has seen Sarah.
the brother went around looking for her together with the house maid who is also worried and wants to find the girl as soon as possible.
john and the housemaid are in the cathedral entrance and they enter the cathedral
4 ext the streets
the brother and the house maid went to the streets and they were looking for the girl but they coulden't find her so they gave up looking for her in the streets 
5 ext police station day
 they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.
6 int brothers house again 
they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.
7  int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house 
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location 
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.

1  EXT IN ALLEWAY DAY
the girl that got kidnapped.
2 INT brother's house day
had a brother at home john who is worried his sister sarah is late coming home from ... so he decides to leave to look for her.
 3 EXT cathedral day
the brother went around looking for her together with the house maid who is also worried and wants to find the girl as soon as possible
4 ext the streets
the brother and the house maid went to the streets and they were looking for the girl but they coulden't find her so they gave up looking for her in the streets 
5 ext police station day
 they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.
6 int brothers house again 
they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.
7  int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house 
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location 
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.

 1- EXT. ALLEYWAY. NIGHT 
THE BLOND LADY GETS KILLED BY A MISTERIOUS FIGURE IN A ALLEYWAY
 
there was for instance this time where he met a blond lady in an alliway she was walking down to go the other side and jack the ripper was waiting on the other side waiting for the women to arrive and then to stabb her.

all the women could see was black gloves black jacket and nothing else. about 2 hours later 2 strong and tall men came to look for the lady who suddenly went missing. the 2 strong tall men coulden't find the women of cource and immediatly went to report this to the police. the police also went to look for the lady but also could not find the lady the police have also noticed that more and more women were getting killed so the police went around the area were all the killing was happening, the area was called the whitechapel district.
so what the police did was send out a search party to find out who is killing all these lady's what the jack the ripper actually did was find prostitutes and slit their throats prior to abdominal mutilations. the removal of the internal organs of the victim lady's suggest that the killer who has been dubbed as jack the ripper had anatomical and surgical knowledge. he obviously knew what to do with the organs or he sold them to doctors who trying to make new discoveries.