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john 18 years old lives in a mansion he has blond hair a big nose big ears and he wears a smart suit.
Sarah 15 years old blond hair and blue eyes she is very pretty
housemaid in her late 60s grey hair blue eyes and shakey hands.
john
where is Sarah have you seen her at all.
housemaid
2 EXT the streets day
they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.
the brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.
no i have not seen Sarah since this morning i was going to ask you where she is.
John
Sarah should be back by now.
housemaid
yes she should be back by now.
john
i'm going out to go and look for her.
housemaid
please do because i am starting to get worried
(John goes out to go and look for his sister.)
2 EXT the streets day
John and the house maid walk through the streets, looking concerned and glancing around.
John
Sarah where are you ?
Housemaid
Sarah! Sarah!
they were looking for the girl but they coulden't find her so they gave up looking for her in the streets
3 ext police station day
they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.
they still couldent find her so they went to the police station and got the police involved, together with the police they were looking for her all round the city.
housemaid
do you think we should go to the police station so they could help us look for Sarah.
John
yes that would be a good idea.
4 int brothers house again they give up and and they cant find her so they give up looking for her and the housemaid and the brother are very sad.
John
Sarah where is Sarah.
housemaid
we shoulden't have let her go now she is gone
john
yes we shoulden't have let her go it was incredibly dangeros.
7 int brothers housethe brother and the housemaid are home and very sad but they get a letter the next day and they read it, the letter was from kidnappers that have kidnapped the girl.
8 int brothers house
the brother and the housemaid receive a letter from the kidnappers of the girl and they receive a ransomthey are worried so they go the police station with the ransom.
9 ext back to the streets
together with the police they go the place where they police have traced down the place where they think the kidnappers are located.
10 int kidnappers location
they agree a fee because the brother belongs to a wealthy family.
11 int kidnappers location
the brother and the house maid already knew that the kidnappers would not let her go so thy already had the money with them.
